《儒俠抽思錄》（自行出版；亞馬遜自行出版，2023）全書內容

[秋水先生]

The Banishment of a Confucianist Warrior
Author and Translator: Rivolia Chen Xiao-Yu (2000 CE–)

《儒俠抽思錄》
陳瀟玉（公元2000年－）撰、譯

“A spirit of extreme magnitude and fortitude that spreads passionately and boldly.”

— Dr. Pu Yi-Nan, poet, author, scholar, former Professor at the Department of Chinese Literature of Tamkang University, and a current instructor at the Department of Chinese of Kaohsiung Normal University in Taiwan on the publications by Rivolia Chen Xiao-Yu’s that he has read

“Her poetic works employ and arrange words with a traditional and elegant erudition as well as poise; many of them are immersed in a melancholic passion while voicing against unfairness.”

— Mr. Wu Zi-Yan, who holds a Master of Arts from the Department of Chinese Literature of Tamkang University and is a recurring winner of the Taipei Literary Prize, is a poet, author, and scholar, in addition to an educator, and whose biography has been included in The Continuation of the Taipei City Book of Records: The Culture officially maintained by the Taiwanese government

「浩氣慷慨。」

——臺灣淡江大學中國文學學系前任教師、高雄師範大學國文學系現任教師、詩人、文人、學者普公義南，評其所閱陳瀟玉已刊之作

「詩作用字典雅穩重，多寓抑鬱情懷，有不平之鳴。」

——淡江大學中國文學系舉人（主流華文稱其為碩士）、臺北文學獎多次得主、臺灣教育部文藝創作獎得主、詩人、文人、學者、教師吳子彥先生，評其所閱陳瀟玉已刊之作

Book Summary

The Banishment of a Confucianist Warrior’s main body collects the traditional Chinese poetry and their American English translations of Rivolia Chen Xiao-Yu — a poet, author, scholar, translator, and organizer of activities on cultural-spiritual China — produced when she was between the ages of eighteen and twenty-two. Rivolia often refers to the collection of unfairness, injustice, anti-learning, atrocities, tyrannies, as well as unhealthy and illogical situations taking place in the present-day mainland China as the “mainland Chinese Vichy France,” out of her belief that the situation of Chen Zi-Ang under these forms of injustice has been highly similar to that of Joan of Arc’s in Vichy France. The mainland Chinese Vichy France as well as white supremacy, colonialism and its remnants, imperialism, and fascism, have been attempting to permanently erase Rivolia’s story. However, during her banishment, Rivolia’s Traditional Chinese poetic voice has cut through these two demonic complexes that have been equally evil. This voice has resembled a pearl-like tear on a blossom in addition to a sword soaring amid the heavens; it reflects the luminosities of Chen Zi-Ang’s martyrdom as well as cultural-spiritual China.

內容概覽

《儒俠抽思錄》主體，收錄詩人、文人、學者、譯者、華夏文化與精神活動組織者陳瀟玉，在十八歲至二十二歲時，所作傳統華文詩詞原文，及美國英文譯文。陳瀟玉之所以將存在於今日中國大陸之不公、不義、不學、暴行、暴政、不健康、不合理，統稱為「中國大陸版維琪法國」，是由於陳瀟玉相信，陳子昂烈士在這些不公、不義、不學、暴行、暴政之下處境，就像貞德在維琪法國處境。今日中國大陸版維琪法國，及白人至上主義、殖民及其殘餘、帝國主義、法西斯主義，試圖永久抹去陳瀟玉故事。然則，在放逐中，陳瀟玉傳統華文詩詞之聲，刺透這兩個同等罪惡之魔障，如花上淚珠，如凌空長劍，映出陳子昂殉道之路靈光，及華夏文化與精神之光。

Initial Publication Information and Acknowledgement

[I have used these pen names: 上官昭雲 (Shangguan Zhaoyun)、尹昭雲、秋水先生、C.C.S. May the readers please also note that “Scarlet Tears on a Golden Branch” was the previous title of Scarlet Tears on an Elegiac Gem Zither.]

Some of my humble works included in The Banishment of a Confucianist Warrior have already been initially and formally published in these platforms in America and Taiwan between 2019 to 2023 CE: the Los Angolos-based Poetry of China, the Light and the Blossom; the Tainan-based Chien-Kun Poetry Quarterly; The Cupola (Gettysburg College); The Mercury, and the New Taipei City-based The Vineyard Poetry Quarterly. My mindful gratitude to the managers of these platforms who have participated in these initial publications of these humble works.

首刊資訊與謝辭

[筆者曾用筆名：上官昭雲（Shangguan Zhaoyun）、尹昭雲、秋水先生、C.C.S。亦請各位讀者垂注：「金枝紅淚」是《錦瑟紅淚》曾用名。]

《儒俠抽思錄》中部分拙作，已在公元2019年至2023年之間，在美國與臺灣，這些平臺正式首發：洛杉磯《中華詩詞》、臺南《乾坤詩刊》、學問樓（格思書院）（美國英文：Cupola (Gettysburg College)）、美國賓州《水星》、新北《葡萄園詩刊》；謹謝這些平臺各位管理員中，參與首發拙作者。

Chen, Xiao-Yu. “The Torment of Lady Daffodil” [水仙怨]. Page 65 in The Mercury. Gettysburg: Graphcom, 2023.

Chen, Xiao-Yu. “The Sword” [劍]. Page 65 in The Mercury. Gettysburg: Graphcom, 2023.

Chen, Xiao-Yu. “’Rhapsody of Agonizing Contemplations on an Autumn Night’ and “​’The Torment of Lady Daffodil’（〈秋夕怨思賦〉與〈水仙怨〉）" (2022). Student Publications. 1040.

https://cupola.gettysburg.edu/student_scholarship/1040

Chen, Xiao-Yu. “Traditional Chinese Poems,” “The White Blossom” and “Agony Unfurls,” as well as the finished Parts in The Martyrdom of Chen Zi-Ang, a Film Screenplay, and “Shadows of Phoenixes” in Scarlet Tears on a Golden Branch, a Novel (華夏傳統詩〈素華〉與〈抽怨〉、電影劇本《陳子昂殉道記》已成之部、小說《金枝紅淚》中〈凰影〉已成之部)" (2022). Student Publications. 1013.

https://cupola.gettysburg.edu/student_scholarship/1013

Chen, Xiao-Yu. Youju 幽居 (“Lonesome Hermitage in the Remote From the Holy Land") in Qiankun Shikan 乾坤詩刊 [Chien-Kun Poetry Quarterly]. Tainan: 2021.

Chen, Xiao-Yu. Heng Dao 橫刀 (“I Draw My Saber, Tears Filling My Eyes —") in Qiankun Shikan 乾坤詩刊 (Chien-Kun Poetry Quarterly). Tainan: 2021.

Chen, Xiao-Yu. Ji Songgong Yingjie 祭宋公英杰 [Elegy in Veneration of the Soul of Mr. Sung Ying-Jie] in Qiankun Shikan 乾坤詩刊 [Chien-Kun Poetry Quarterly]. Tainan: 2020.

Chen, Xiao-Yu. Ji Xie Linka Liu Wen Yishi 記謝琳卡、劉文醫師 [Doctors Xie Linka and Liu Wen] in Qiankun Shikan 乾坤詩刊 [Chien-Kun Poetry Quarterly]. Tainan: 2020.

Chen, Xiao-Yu. Youlan 幽蘭 [Soliloquy of Lady Orchid] in Zhonghua Shici 中華詩詞 [Poetry of China, the Light and the Blossom]. Los Angeles: 2019.

Chen, Xiao-Yu. Guan Wutong Niangzi Manwu 觀吾佟娘子曼舞 [Celestial Dancer Spreading Petals From the Above] in Zhonghua Shici 中華詩詞 [Poetry of China, the Light and the Blossom]. Los Angeles: 2019.

Chen, Xiao-Yu. Xunjiao 殉教 [Martyrdom] in Putaoyuan Shikan 葡萄園詩刊 [The Vineyard Poetry Quarterly]. New Taipei City: 2017.

My mindful thankfulness to Dr. Pu Yi-Nan, who is a poet, author, scholar, and a former Professor at the Department of Chinese Literature of Tamkang University, and a current instructor at the Department of Chinese of Kaohsiung University in Taiwan; as well as Mr. Wu Zi-Yan, who holds a Master of Arts from the Department of Chinese Literature of Tamkang University, is a recurring winner of the Taipei Literary Prize, is a poet, author, and scholar, in addition to an educator, and whose biography has been included in The Continuation of the Taipei City Book of Records: The Culture officially maintained by the Taiwanese government, for their offering of brief positive reviews on my literary, intellectual, and erudite sophistications for my use in the professional and public realms. The main body of The Banishment of a Confucianist Warrior collects thirty-one Traditional Chinese poems I composed when I was eighteen to twenty-two years old. My gratitude to Mr. Wu Zi-Yan and Dr. Chien Chin-Sung, a Professor Emeritus, a current research fellow, and a previous department chair at the Department of Chinese Literature of the Sun Yat-Sen University in Taiwan for their advising on some contents in this collection based on their professional identities and working skills. My humble thankfulness to these senior scholars and authors as well as this Writing Center employee at Gettysburg College for their assistance to the American English version of The Banishment of a Confucianist Warrior: Professor Emeritus Dr. Leonard S. Goldberg, Dr. Nadine Sabra Meyer, Dr. Melissa K. Forbes, Dr. Kelly Whitcomb, Dr. Joanne Elizabeth Myers, and Alex Evan Bernstein.

Finally, as a Confucianist warrior, I bow to the Almighty Heaven for its blessing and protection of me; I bow in my gratitude to China, the Light, the Blossom, and the Hallowed Land, in addition to Chen Zi-Ang, a noble, fiery warrior and a martyr. From the perspective of interfaith, I reverently invite Joan of Arc (French: Jeanne d’Arc) to pray for the entwined missions of Chen Zi-Ang and mine in the professional and the public realms.

謹謝臺灣淡江大學中國文學學系前任教師、高雄師範大學國文學系現任教師、詩人、文人、學者普公義南，及淡江大學中國文學系舉人（主流華文稱其為碩士）、臺北文學獎多次得主、臺灣教育部文藝創作獎得主、詩人、文人、學者、教師吳子彥先生，就筆者文采學問，惠賜供筆者在職業、公眾領域，使用之正面短評。《儒俠抽思錄》主體部分，收錄筆者從十八歲至二十二歲，所作三十一首傳統華文詩詞；謹謝吳子彥先生，及臺灣中山大學中國文學系退休教師、現任研究員、前系主任簡錦松先生，基於職業身分、工作技能，就其中部分內容，指教筆者。謹謝美國賓州格思書院（葛底斯堡學院）這些前輩學者文人，或格思書院寫作中心員工，對《儒俠抽思錄》美國英文版，惠賜協助：Professor Emeritus Dr. Leonard S. Goldberg、Dr. Nadine Sabra Meyer、Dr. Melissa K. Forbes、Dr. Kelly Whitcomb、Dr. Joanne Elizabeth Myers、Alex Evan Bernstein。

最後，筆者作為儒俠，拜謝皇天賜祐；拜謝神州華夏；拜謝陳子昂烈士。與此同時，筆者從綜合信仰角度，敬請貞德（法文：Jeanne d’Arc）為陳子昂與筆者，在職業與公眾領域之相連使命祈福。

May I please bow deeply as I dedicate The Banishment of a Confucianist Warrior to Chen Zi-Ang (659–700 CE), a noble, fiery warrior and a great martyr of China.

筆者頓首謹獻《儒俠抽思錄》，於華夏偉大烈士陳子昂（公元659年－700年）。

Contents

Soliloquy of Lady Orchid
Celestial Dancer Spreading Petals From the Above
Elegy in Veneration of the Soul of Mr. Sung Ying-Jie
Doctors Xie Linka and Liu Wen
“I Draw My Saber, Tears Filling My Eyes — ”
Lonesome Hermitage in the Remote From the Holy Land
​​The White Blossom
Agony Unfurls
Rhapsody of Agonizing Contemplations on an Autumn Night
The Torment of Lady Daffodil
The Sword
Inflorescence
The Autumn Grieves
Lyrics on My Route of Banishment
Agonies at a Graveyard
The Salon
Agony Through All Seasons: I
Agony Through All Seasons: II
Agony Through All Seasons: III
Agony Through All Seasons: IV
The Tormented Yearning
The Autumn Sorrow
Tears on Autumn Screen
Gem-Tower Lyrics: Chill
Elegy in Veneration of the Soul of My Father: I
Elegy in Veneration of the Soul of My Father: II
Chrysanthemum
Soliloquy of Lady Lotus
The Spring Shattered
Elegy Before the Peace Pole at Gettysburg College
Appendix: Martyrdom
About Rivolia Chen Xiao-Yu

Soliloquy of Lady Orchid

Immaculate moon through clouds
Illuminates this immortal summit,
Where sweet olive blossoms
Wither in this autumn jade garden —
Clad in a frosted white robe, I mourn
My imminent fate,
Alone on this pure night,
When the jewels I wear chill me
And the tears imprinting my face
Are turning to blood —

Traditional Chinese original published in 2019 CE
English translation finalized in 2021 CE

幽蘭
雲中白月照仙巒，玉苑含秋桂子殘。縞素青娥環佩冷，清宵寂寂淚痕丹。

Celestial Dancer Spreading Petals From the Above

Amidst golden screens, as a deep-green jade zither plays,
Luminosity streams from this immortal dancer,
Pink-cheeked and white-robed. The music resembles
The murmuring of delicate phoenixes.
Her pearl dress sways with her spreading purple scarf
Radiating a celestial glow.
The fragrance enchants the spring moon above,
Her delicate hands spreading petals in this Hall of Buddha —
I pick her blossoms on which I write
My deep meditations on her art
And on her lasting devotion.

Traditional Chinese original published in 2019 CE
English translation finalized in 2021 CE

觀吾佟娘子曼舞
金屏燈下泛明光，粉面瑤姬繫白裳。碧玉弦彈嬌鳳語，真珠裙舞紫霓香。
仙眸睇客媚春月，酥手拋花滿佛堂。雅士拾芳題麗句，紅紗青字寄思長。

Elegy in Veneration of the Soul of Mr. Sung Ying-Jie

The moon descends to long, cold rivers in your native land
Where apricot woods are newly dipped with dews of dolor —
Your soul is a fragrance ascending to the azure sky
Your white jade bones buried in the realm of crimson dust —
The silent and lonesome night falls on the other world
The pure waters here turn green in an agonized spring,
I am a cockatoo singing an elegy
And in this prolonged separation weep blood for you!

Traditional Chinese original published in 2020 CE
English translation finalized in 2021 CE

祭宋公英杰
月落沅湘冷，杏林愁露新。香魂託碧落，玉骨沒紅塵。
寂寞黃泉夜，淒清綠水春。杜鵑長隔此，啼血悼斯人。

Doctors Xie Linka and Liu Wen

The song of truth on this snowy night
Spreads across the heavens and fills
China the Holy Land and startles
The despots who can lock our cities
But never our lips; our chorus lives on
And flows with our eternal rivers!

Traditional Chinese original published in 2020 CE
English translation finalized in 2021 CE

記謝琳卡、劉文醫師
雪夜靈烏曲，扶搖遍九州。鎖城難鎖口，浩氣滿江流。

“I Draw My Saber, Tears Filling My Eyes — ”

I draw my saber, tears filling my eyes —
I tell the profound Heaven that I will die
In prison and not surrender to them —
To these gangsters who in their obsession
Drain and drink people’s blood,
Who seize ever more despotic power,
And occupy the Holy Land! I wonder
When the dawn I call for will arrive.

Traditional Chinese original published in 2021 CE
English translation finalized in 2021 CE

橫刀
橫刀含淚告蒼天，寧死牢中不媚權。嗜血獨夫猖復獗，明夷見訪在何年。

Lonesome Hermitage in the Remote From the Holy Land

I gaze at the Holy Land that is too far from me; under fragrant branches
Outside my embroidered chamber, my profound agony unravels.
The azure Heaven is in cold clouds and mists; cherry blossoms are crimson
In my golden garden where this quiet night twists my lungs in sorrow —
As the wind of solitude fills my vision
I meditate on my poetry: I pause on these jade stairs
And shed tears in luminous moonbeams —

Traditional Chinese original published in 2021 CE
English translation finalized in 2021 CE

幽居
望郢芳枝下，抽思繡戶東。碧霄雲霧冷，金苑海棠紅。
幽素侵愁肺，清寒入寂瞳。裁詩瑤砌上，垂淚月明中。

The White Blossom

Faint frosts dye the lonesome celestial palace
While chilly moonbeams shine on my white robe.
My pure songs sway with cosmic green mists
And my jade visage allures fragrant clouds from the Heavens.
A lone bloom, I uphold my spring beauty
Without longing for materials
Bound to the mundane in crimson dust.
My jewel-like meditations spread across emptiness
As I wonder who has ever heard my voice
As fervent as that of a phoenix.

Traditional Chinese original published in 2022 CE
English translation finalized in 2022 CE

素華

霜重天宮寞，寒蟾映素裙。清歌搖綠霧，玉面媚香雲。
自愛韶儀重，寧思塵世紛。瑤情空繾綣，鳳囀復誰聞。

Agony Unfurls

Silver lamplights that sometimes dim and sometimes glow
Shine on my traditional lines resembling shattered golds —
I am a lonesome warrior whose starry eyes weep
Tears resembling blood for my beliefs
And are turning to gems in my sacrifice.
My frost-nipped poetic pages open
Like flowery embroideries
As I chant and spread my elegies
In my banishment from the Holy Land.
I have been praying to spend my life and death
Singing for justice in the manner of phoenixes!

Alas, how brutal air prevails
On my native rivers that seem fine silks to me!
I, a Confucianist warrior dedicated to the cosmic Way,
Have not the slightest fear before all forms of tyrannies!
Variegated celestial beams fall upon my chivalrous devotions
During my ongoing, remote voyage away from the hallowed land.
I have been painstakingly
Reciting and imitating medieval musical lyrics —
In one deepening night, in my banishment and torments
I swallow my pain, muse over and chant my sorrowful verse
As my white blanket wraps my slender flesh quietly and tightly.

My soul resembles a sword while my flesh resembles soft weeping willows —
How many times it has been tortured by infirmity and illness
And has been drenched in chills and medical vapors!

Heaven recognizes that my sorrow has been intoxicating my heart
As I lost all sleep in my passionate gazing on the hallowed land.
My glass window was in solitude and quietude as tender blossoms
Shatter and embroidery-like saplings were frozen with empty verdancy.
All my organs have been twisted and torn as my agony unfurls
My rhythms of long lineage flown and spread as scattered crimson petals.

Every night, I, a young Confucianist warrior, devote myself to my classics
As my pure tears stream along with smokey moonbeams.
My voice has been as tragic and passionate as those of cockatoos and Lady Cai’s
And my agony has been grilling and ingraining my emaciated bones
While increasing my strains to rise from my sickbed.

Original composed and finalized in Traditional Chinese in 2020, using exactly the same meters, rhythms, and form as those of Liu Rushi’s (1618–1664) “Spring River Night in Blossoms and Moonbeams.” English translation composed in 2022.

抽怨 用柳如是<春江花月夜>瑤韻。
明滅銀燈照玉屑，孤俠星眸凝碧血。染霜詩箋如花纈，靈均楚吟聲淒絕。
寧鳴而死作啼凰，豈用宮體描鴛鴦。獨見戾氣滿錦江，梨洲何懼商紂王。
離騷溢彩子蘭窘，遠遊苦學箜篌引。含恨效兮蠶室忍，素衾悄裹纖體緊。
劍眉凝寒藥氣膩，蒲柳之軀病幾次。天鑒此心憂如醉，三更望郢猶未睡。
璃窗寂寞嫣香墜，庭中綺樹凝空翠。抽思一夕腸九回，險韻錯落殘紅飛。
夜夜發憤向儒匼，淋漓清淚滴煙月。杜鵑歌哀比蔡女，愁磨瘦骨愈難起。

Rhapsody of Agonizing Contemplations on an Autumn Night

Composed under the persona of Chen Zi-Ang (659—700 CE) the martyr.

The moon, where the soul of a mythological beauty resides,
Hangs in loftiness and immaculate purity in the firmament
While the Milky Way is cleansed and extends to the remoteness.
My lone autumn garden is frozen with coolness
And my medical burner exhales thin yet bitter vapors.
I uphold my finesse amidst my quiet hermitage,
While my heart is infused with prolonged sorrows
As I recline on my sickbed, prostrated by my infirmities.
In shattered candlelight and recurring sleeplessness
I touch my Daoist prayer beads and descend into deep prayers.

In the past, I read classics and scriptures at the Golden Brilliance Monastery
Where my fierce, noble ambition — an involuntary obsession —
Has risen above the firmaments. I look down upon the green and chilly waters
As I recite and compose impassioned poetic lines, while sometimes
I gaze at the remote, eternal jade realm and narrate on my torments.

I wore my sword on my back and entered Luoyang, where I
Painstakingly and diligently immersed myself in books under my study window.
Without caring even if I am to be killed tens of thousands of times
I repeatedly express my disagreements in my yearning to defend the Way
And to bring peace upon countless people.
Despite my incorruption, determination, and loyalty, I was kept in stocks:
I, whose purity resembled that of a piece of white jade, was imprisoned
For well over a year, during which blood and tears streamed,
Their profound undercurrents have been piercing my heart every night.

I have returned to the mountains within a frosted forest
Where I explore the Book of Changes and calculations on it
While cleansing my psyche. Wrapping myself in a plain blanket
I observe the transformations of innumerable scenarios
And sense that my departure from this world is approaching.
How long could all fresh and alluring earthbound beauties ever last?
May I follow the honored dragons and cranes in ascending
To the hallowed immortal realm enveloped within immaculate clouds!

Traditional Chinese original published in 2022 CE
English translation finalized in 2022 CE

秋夕怨思賦（代伯玉烈士作。陳子昂，字伯玉。）
娥魄皓潔，絳河迢遞。秋園凝寒，藥爐煙薄。
持韶儀以幽居，懷惆悵而臥疾。撫流珠且深祈，對殘燈復無眠。
昔讀經於金華，有猛志自凌霄。俯滄瀾而長吟，望玉京以敘憂。
負劍入洛，苦節觀書。昧萬死而屢諫，冀護道並安民。
廉貞被枷，白璧陷獄。年餘血淚，夜夜錐心。
歸東山之霜林，研易占而自清。裹素衾而觀化，覺百年之漸近。
紅塵鮮妍兮，能幾時？願隨龍鶴兮，登白雲！

The Torment of Lady Daffodil

Within my melancholic meditations,
The half-scattered lotuses were pink and white
Amidst green princess bamboos;
Beneath swaying, thin clouds sunken in sorrow
Fragmented branches were twisted. —
I remember how, when thinking on my flesh’s upcoming separation
From hallowed China, my profuse, dense grieving
Flowed into tragic rivers, infusing my impassioned heart
From which I recite my traditional lines echoing medieval heritages.
It was several years after a gangster against people
Seized an enormous earthbound power and wealth complex
Combined with a position — keeping a tight grip into the present.

My words resembling pearls and jades were interconnected
By my sorrowful contemplations; after my banishment, from the remote
I gazed at the south of China, the Light, the Blossom, and the Magnitude
While upholding my beauty; my tender-voiced sobs were interwoven.
My fine face was paled by my fervent troubles
And I felt like an aloeswood incense on immolation;
My slender shadow was similar to a phoenix wounded at her wings.
Densing autumn small frosts have dyed my dark hair
While my embroidered dress quivered in night blows.

From indomitable soul that has been as cleansed and pure as rivers in the wilderness
I have been weeping blood while my flesh suffers from nose-bleeds:
My anguish has ensanguined all leaves in my vision —
Their glow has intersected with yellowish autumn branches.
Above the orchids hills, ghosts cried within luminous, flowing moonbeams
While my heart drenched in my torments knotted more agonies
And twined me in pains. Various flowers that once bloomed in splendor now wither
While my pure tears followed; the fading green leaves shriveled
As does my flesh webbed in illness.

Who has ever consoled me —
A young Confucianist warrior banished from China, the hallowed land,
Because of the current bloodthirsty gangster against people and his impact.
My beauty resembles spring apricots, and I have been weaving
My traumas into my chantings — the hues of my tears
Have imprinted and dyed the embroidered silks of my lapels.
Every year, my torment and physical infirmity intensify
As I pause myself in my prolonged, lonesome standing
And envy — in vain — birds soaring southwards
To their native lands.

Original Traditional Chinese composition began in 2021 CE, using exactly the same meters, rhythms, and form as those of Liu Rushi’s (1618–1664 CE) “Ballad of Lotus-Gathering.” Traditional Chinese original and English translation finalized in 2022 CE.

水仙怨 用柳如是〈採蓮曲〉瑤韻。
殘荷粉白妃竹綠，流雲慘淡殘枝曲。沅湘淒冷楚情濃，斷腸聲繼三十六。
珠璣字字怨思牽，望郢悲歌嬌咽連。美人憔悴蜜香消，瘦影偏如折翼鸞。
迷離秋霰染青絲，羅衣瑟瑟夜風吹。貞魂澄澈如江水，斑竹恨血映枝黃。
蘭皋鬼哭月濛濛，愁心漸結千千網。繁華零落清淚從，墜綠支離瘦骨同。
誰念無眠夭杏子，襟頭淚色染羅綺。年年愁病苦相加，延佇空慕南歸雉。

The Sword

I am a sword purer than frost, luminous
For gallantry, honorable duties, and enlightened learning.
With the spirit of a dragon, for the Holy Land I fight
In my splashing blood, now become jewels from sacrifice,
As I sing my battlesong in the voice of a phoenix, transcending
My life into a dance, echoing, with shooting stars, the eternal.
I am a spreading celestial glow of learning and courage
Cutting through and dismantling the phalanxes
That serve the gangsters who brutalize and are against the people —
A magnitude as wide and lofty as the heavens,
An imprint in the profundity of the ages;
My chivalrous soul is a sharpening blade
Praying to spend all my reincarnations as a warrior,
Roaming for such ideals: the victory of cultural-spiritual China
And such impassioned battles!

Traditional Chinese original finalized in 2021 CE
English translation initially published in April 2023 CE

劍
蜀山有劍較霜泠，重義輕身護六經。龍戰九州凝碧血，鳳鳴萬古舞流星。
長霓破陣擊民賊，浩氣橫空貫汗青。敢挾丹心磨利刃，生生任俠慨然行。

Inflorescence

Her immaculate wrists spread her sleeves resembling golden phoenixes
As luminosities dance with verdancy and delicate, flourishing petals.
Peach blossoms and thin willows smile with tenderness
Their jade-like faces turn upwards as they welcome such a Beauty;
She descends from the Heaven and covers every distant mountain.

Traditional Chinese original finalized in 2018 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

女夷
皓腕輕舒金鳳袖，明光舞翠緋華秀。夭桃細柳笑盈嬌，玉面迎娥臨遠岫。

The Autumn Grieves

Chill —
Within this perfumed palace
Weeping hues are shattered
On my beauteous visage.
The golden incense burner is shadowed
As my flesh is exhausted and my heart is tormented
On this lonesome, quiet, and deepening night.

Traditional Chinese original finalized in 2018 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

十六字令．秋怨
寒。香苑秦妃泣色殘。金籠暗，人倦寂宵闌。

Lyrics on My Route of Banishment

Lonesome and quiet is my route of banishment
Now extending into this deserted village
As the autumn deepens and the crimson sun
Descends into a twilight.
The frosts chill my bones webbed in my illness
While grass withers and immerses in sorrowful dews.

Traditional Chinese original composed in 2018 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

行吟
寂寂荒村徑，秋深紅日暮。霜淒病客寒，衰草含愁露。

Agonies at a Graveyard

Where all graves are darkening and grass is densing
Cool moonbeams are frozen amidst deep-green maples.
Amid my illness, my head is dyed silver — I agonize
As worms feed on the skeletons in their coffins.

Traditional Chinese original composed in 2018 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

隴頭悲
草密墳灰處，青楓凝冷月。銀頭病客悲，蟲食棺中骨。

The Salon

The white, immaculate moon quietly and lonesomely
Sheds its luminosity over this extensive, snow-nipped river
While the embroidered silk curtains shimmer on our phoenix-boat.
With a smile, you immolate a sapphire fire within a golden burner
From where thin mist rises, giving birth to a nectarous aroma.
The mountains are immersed in their hermitage
While the waters are spreading into profundity;
From cool heavens, breezes gently surpass my green robe
Resembling clouds. Before a drooping purple jade ornament
We discuss such poetry as rhapsodies; those elegant rhymes
And perfumed smokes surround this sweet olive chamber.

Traditional Chinese original composed from 2018 to 2019 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

​​鷓鴣天．雅聚
白月幽幽照雪江。鳳凰船上錦帷光。湘君含笑燒青火，霧滿金爐生蜜香。
山隱隱，水茫茫。寒天微度綠雲裳。紫玉鉤前談詩賦，雅韻蒼煙繞桂堂。

Agony Through All Seasons: I

Peach blossoms wither
My infirm flesh emaciated
At twilight, fragrance fades
With hues of spring —
On this painted balcony
I pause myself and weep profusely
Tears turning into blood —
My agony fills this golden tower
In my separation from the Holy Land
As I become drenched in such a breezing chill!

Traditional Chinese original finalized in 2019 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

長相思．四時怨（一）
謹註：瀟玉此作，蓋擬神州，為美人也。

桃花殘。病身殘。日暮香消春色闌。含啼倚畫欄。
淚潸潸。血潸潸。愁滿金樓人未還。東風著體寒。

Agony Through All Seasons: II

Chilly are the white heavens
Chilly are the green waters —
I yearn for the Holy Land
As my vision is filled with sorrow
During my voyage in blossoms
Drenched in shattered morning dews —
Crimson are the lotuses
Crimson are my tears’ imprints,
I am an invalid whose torment
Floats with my sweet olive boat,
Twisting all my organs amid
My separation from the Holy Land!

Traditional Chinese original finalized in 2019 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

長相思．四時怨（二）
謹註：瀟玉此作，蓋擬神州，為美人也。

白天寒。綠水寒。池上思君愁目酸。花含晨露殘。
芙蓉丹。淚痕丹。病裡離情滿桂船。天涯人未還。

Agony Through All Seasons: III

Cold is my golden mansion
Cold is my phoenix couch —
In my bittersweet waiting, the incense
Resembling my tormented heart burns,
Greenish smokes arise
From my gemmed burner —
Condensing is the aromatic mist
Densing is my agonized yearning
For the Holy Land that is invisible to me —
My emaciated flesh drenches in illness
My crimson tears shed in troops
In another of my insomnias
Deepening in the night!

Traditional Chinese original finalized in 2019 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

​​長相思．四時怨（三）
謹註：瀟玉此作，蓋擬神州，為美人也。

金屋寒。鳳床寒。獸焰空燒心字殘。寶爐生綠煙。
香霧綿。離愁綿。病裡思君血淚潸。夜深人未眠。

Agony Through All Seasons: IV

Chilled are these darkening woods
Chilled is my flesh tortured by illness —
As I wander on fringes, sorrowful breezes
Shatter the snows; in the deep clouds
The night is fading away —
My tears shed in troops
And are turning to blood,
My agony is lasting
Until the fall of the Heaven
And the end of the earth,
Twisting and scattering all my organs
Amid my separation from the Holy Land!

Traditional Chinese original finalized in 2019 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

​​長相思．四時怨（四）
謹註：瀟玉此作，蓋擬神州，為美人也。

黑樹寒。病骨寒。邊地悲風吹雪殘。雲深夜欲闌。
淚潸潸。血潸潸。愁到天摧地亦翻。斷腸人未還。

The Tormented Yearning

My embroidered fine silk blanket
Wraps my illness-tormented body:
I am drenched in my solitude and emaciation
While my pure tears wet my handkerchief.
My medical burner exhales thin vapors
As this sweet olive-colored noble house darkens:
Rain chills my banishment as mists
Lock up my shattered spring.
My delicate handkerchief as well as
My aromatic lapels are frozen
With my traces of blood.
On this quiet night, I yearn for
Holy China; my soul bore a deep wound
From my separation. From the firmaments
Breezes cool the silver droplets
Ornamenting my sickbed:
My darkening melancholies rise
And incarcerate me forever.

Traditional Chinese original finalized in 2019 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

​​一剪梅．相思
謹註：瀟玉此作，蓋擬神州，為美人也。

錦被珠帷掩病身。瘦影煢煢，清淚沾巾。
藥爐煙薄桂堂昏，雨冷瀟湘，霧鎖殘春。
羅帕香襟凝血痕。靜夜思君，墨客銷魂。
寒天微度小銀鉤，幽緒紛紛。愁滿重門。

The Autumn Sorrow

From my pearl curtains overlapping
With this tranquil night, in sorrow,
I hear wild geese cry —
My solitude darkens and deepens;
In my high tower where fragrant
Orchids are white-dew-dipped,
Moonbeams glow.
My candle has expired,
The greenish smoke that once rose
From it has drifted away;
From my soul, its torture intensifying,
My tears and blood flow —
I yearn for China the Holy Land
Which remains invisible to me
As this autumn and the emptiness
Filling my window separate us!

Traditional Chinese original finalized in 2019 CE
English translation finalized in 2022 CE

秋怨
謹註：瀟玉思者，華夏文化與精神也。瀟玉此作，蓋擬華夏文化與精神，為美人也。

病雁啼寒素，珠帷靜夜愁。幽蘭含白露，明月照高樓。
燭斷青煙渺，魂銷血淚流。天涯人不見，更隔一簾秋。

Tears on Autumn Screen

I read Mr. Wu Zi-Yan’s erudite posts with reverence, alone on an autumn night. I yearn for his professional guidance in my Confucianist passion. His wisdom has been such a consolation; I bow to him in my gratitude and humbleness, while my lamentation is recorded in my line on my longing in vain for this celestial chamber of Chinese cultural-spiritual erudition. My passion untwines, my tears drip, and my desk turns wet.

Your jade voice ascends to the Above in the white clouds
As I gaze at your words in illness, solitude, and separation
From the Holy Land; my tears drip on the autumn screen
As I long in vain for a celestial chamber of Chinese erudition —

Traditional Chinese original composed in 2019 CE, at Gettysburg College
English translation slightly revised in 2022 CE, at Gettysburg College

淚灑秋屏

謹註：己亥八月，獨坐一室，拜讀吳先生子彥連加網路貼文。僕奉儒學，僕慕儒士，僕思尊教。僕之悲嘆，載於拙句：「天涯何處是嫏嬛」？先生網誌，稍慰愁心，謹拜謝之。諸般情懷，相纏一處，淚下哽咽，書案亦濕。又：吳先生子彥號白雲齋主。

玉聲幽上白雲間，病客獨看青字斑。淚灑素屏腸欲斷，天涯何處是嫏嬛！

Gem-Tower Lyrics: Chill

Chill
Medical bitterness
Lonesome shadow
Dark light fades
Pure tears scatter
My banishment is extensive
My agonizing yearning spreads
Moonbeams dye my world white
Heaven witnesses my chivalry intensifying
My passionate torment emaciates my flesh
As I compose this lyric in blood

Traditional Chinese original composed in 2020 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

寶塔詩：寒

寒
藥苦
形單
青燈滅
清淚殘
郢路浩浩
楚思漫漫
月照一庭白
天鑒此心丹
憂憤陰纏瘦骨
血書長凝傷嘆

Elegy in Veneration of the Soul of My Father: I

Chilly mists and thin rain
Drench my seclusion from the earthbound world,
While a cockatoo’s chant of lament
Deepens this agonizing night.
My small, crimson, blossom-like poetic papers
Are frozen with my blood
That I weep from my heart’s torments,
As I am clad in my white mourning robe
And reminisce on your fragrant soul.

Traditional Chinese originals finalized in December 20, 2020 CE
English translations finalized in 2023 CE

祭父（一）
寒煙細雨隱重門，杜宇聲淒夜色昏。小砑紅箋凝恨血，幽人縞素憶香魂。

Elegy in Veneration of the Soul of My Father: II

The pure frosts have fallen into a lonesome quietude
Within this jade garden where autumn deepens
And my elegiac zither chills.
As I play these laments, my sorrowful yearning
Entwines me — in my banishment, in vain
My profuse tears are turning to blood.

Traditional Chinese originals finalized in December 20, 2020 CE
English translations finalized in 2023 CE

祭父（二）
清霜落寞素華殘，玉苑秋深錦瑟寒。哀曲終兮思未絕，幽人空泣血潸潸。

Chrysanthemum

The frosted firmaments and luminous moonbeams
Reflect the purification of my autumn skin
As lonesome and quiet gnostic energies
Breeze through my jade robe.
A fragrance is born amid the jewels adorning my flesh
While my shattered dreams are cooling —
I am unable to return to my native rivers resembling fine silks
This separation drenches my beauteous soul in a prolonged agony.
My pure visage is frozen in my solitude
While my grief ruptures my organs,
My bones webbed in my illness are falling apart
As my darkening, intensifying sufferings rise.
Every night, my torments unfurl, as my tears
Transcend into gem-like blood within my sacrifice;
Every dawn, I pause my vision on the remote hallowed China
And let my melancholies lock me in a deepening captivity.

Traditional Chinese original finalized in 2021 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

菊
霜天明月照秋肌，幽素靈風度玉衣。環佩香生殘夢冷，錦江道阻倩魂悲。
清顏寂寞柔腸斷，病骨支離暗恨滋。夜夜抽思啼碧血，朝朝望郢鎖雙眉。

Soliloquy of Lady Lotus

Within my lonesome and quiet banishment and hermitage
I am clad in a white mourning robe as I rise from my sickbed —
I gaze at China the hallowed land that is distant from me
As my torments unfold: I sing my memories and meditations
While the frosted heavens and the luminous moon
Shed their radiance upon my slender shadow
Amidst chilling autumn waters and trees resembling jades.

My fragrant tears tremble, fall profusely, and turn crimson
While they are transforming to blood upon my tender heart
And are imprinting my lapels with a natural purpleness.
My hair braid resembling a soaring cloud
Upholds two golden phoenixes despite my solitude;
The jewels I wear as well as my silk dress sway in a ghostly energy.

Holding a sweet olive branch within my hand, I chant from my heart
From my cultural-spiritual Chinese heritage and my agonies of banishment:
As my voice for China the Holy Land extends to the Above,
Thin white hairs stand on end on my flesh out of my sorrow and illness.
Incenses immolate quietly and impassionedly within my gemmed palace
As I weep blood and spread tear-turned rhythms from my noble soul.

I contemplate how, in these years, I have been weaving my agonies
Into songs such as the one I am now singing, and how my pains
Have been flowing into extensive, grand rivers swaying in cool, deep greenness.
I, remember, too, how I have witnessed the tender smiles and the aromatic splendor
Of blossoms within breezes and dews — all of them now scatter along with branches.
How fragile are these sceneries resembling crystals, and in how much hardship
I strive to flourish with my cultural-spiritual Chinese psyche and beauty!

Alone, independent, I stand on this pure night within my boundless torture.
My medical burner’s vapor surrounds my embroidered jade green bed.
Where do I envision my snow-hued flesh and my delicate bones to be interred?
Beneath pale cypresses, within an archaic graveyard in withered grass.

Traditional Chinese original composed in 2021 CE, using exactly the same meters, rhythms, and form as those of Liu Rushi’s (1618–1664 CE) “Lyrics on the Festival of Purity and Luminosity.” English translation finalized in 2022 CE.

蓮 用柳如是<清明行>瑤韻。
幽人縞素扶病起，望郢抽思歌情旨。霜天明月照纖影，秋水凝寒玉為柱。
瑟瑟芳淚轉殷紅，柔襟染血自然紫。飛雲空簪雙金鸞，環佩羅衣含鬼氣。
結桂長抒靈均心，離騷賦成華髮生。麝炷暗消琳宮裡，杜宇貞魂蓄高情。
啼聲淒如蔡女曲，沅湘滄波空漾淥。風露嫣香飄殘枝，琉璃易碎花難續。
獨立清宵恨茫茫，藥爐煙滿碧羅床。雪肌艷骨何處寄，白楊荒村在道旁。

The Spring Shattered

My tears resembling pearls are falling troops
Crimson petals of fragrance once in full bloom —
The saplings’s greenness is now emaciating
So is my flesh long-tormented by illness —
All my organs have been rupturing
From my agony in my separation from the Holy Land —
As I gaze at it from its distance in this pure night
How watery are these moonbeams in the deep
Of the clouds and mists between us—

Traditional Chinese original finalized in 2021 CE
English translation finalized in 2023 CE

殘春 孤雁出群格。
紅香零落淚珠從，墜綠支離病骨同。望郢清宵腸欲斷，寒煙深處月濛濛。

Elegy Before the Peace Pole at Gettysburg College

In my prostration, I pray for the Almighty Heaven’s blessings upon the luminous soul of Emily Rachel Silverstein.

Spring breezes untwine and descend upon
This cool night that shines in a tragic passion:
Smokey petals soar around this jade-like pole
Where a perfumed name is inscribed in deep-green ink
While pure moonbeams reminisce on her fragrant soul
As well as her noble, ambitious determination —
Birds chant their lament for her grace resembling crimson blossoms
While weeping blood and tears that are frosting all branches
In mourning of their prolonged separation from a young beauty
And the eternal memorial of her peaceful purity.
In my banishment from hallowed China, I weave my agony for her
With traditional poetic rhythms, as I gather these grievings
And witness how they spread and fill the entire crystalline garden.

Traditional Chinese original composed in 2022 CE
English translation finalized in 2022 CE

格思書院和平柱前輓歌

伏祈皇天，祐Emily Rachel Silverstein之明靈。

繾綣東風落，淒涼夜未昏。煙花飛玉柱，清月憶芳魂。
鳥唱惜紅曲，枝凝哭血痕。幽人吟別恨，愁滿水精園。

Appendix: Martyrdom (Finalized in February 2017)

Within this night of prolonged darkness
Immaculation is only found in graveyards —
I carry a wine chalice
While following the scent of blood
In my search for your dead body,
You are the young martyr for whom
I desire with thirst through all days and nights.
Here you recline — your lips are so nectarous
As your still-fresh blood is flowing
Into a resplendent beauty resembling wild berries —
In reticence, I insert my finger into your heart!
A wave of delusions combined with ecstasics
Is penetrating my bosom —
I take out my chalice and imbibe
Your scarlet blood in secrecy.
My amorous prayers for my devotion-death!
You have turned your life into a spiritual sacrifice
I now turn my life into a romantic immolation.
I mix poisonous drips with your blood still-fresh
And I lick all of them clean.
I transform into a blossom-red, delicate serpent
Twisting your dreams and yearnings
In your every reincarnation.

About Rivolia Chen Xiao-Yu

Rivolia Chen Xiao-Yu (March 19, 2000–) is a Chinese poet, author, scholar, translator, and organizer of activities on cultural-spiritual China. She currently serves as a council member of the Taiwan-based Archaic Poetic Association. Using interdisciplinary methods, she studies, analyzes, and follows Chen Zi-Ang, a medieval Chinese poet, author, scholar, twice-prisoner, and martyr, while conducting her research, analysis, composition, and English translation focused on cultural-spiritual China (such as the contributions of Huang Zongxi, a Confucianist warrior). From roughly the age of eleven, she has actively participated in the social-historical power of the re-understanding, in-depth appreciation, and profound manifestations of cultural-spiritual China. There are two significant reasons why she has banished herself from mainland China. First, the situation of Chen Zi-Ang under the present-day (2023) “mainland Chinese Vichy France” is highly similar to that of Joan of Arc’s in Vichy France. Second, a significant dimension of her current life mission to benefit others is, as a poet, author, scholar, translator, and organizer of activities on cultural-spiritual China, to establish a world under the Heaven in which nobody sees China as a barbaric enemy state. Since her professional identities do not include being a political leader or a political commentator, et cetera, in the professional and the public sphere, she does not have a very strong political nature; however, there have been countless correlations between her mission and politics. To carry out her current life mission benefiting others, she must respond to these countless correlations between politics and her mission.

Besides being the translator, editor, and commentator of Like a Blossom, a Sword, and a Meteor: The Impassioned Battles, Incarcerations, and Martyrdom of Chen Zi-Ang (Chisinau: Eliva Press, 2023), as well as the original author, translator, and editor of The Banishment of a Confucianist Warrior (self-published; Amazon Kindle Direct Publishing, 2023), since her adolescence, she has published her poetry, prose, and translations in these venues in America and Taiwan: Poetry of China, The Light and the Blossom, Chien-Kun Poetry Quarterly, The Vineyard Poetry Quarterly, the Abington Friends School-based The Whole Tree, The Mercury, Ezra: An Online Journal of Translation, The Gettysburgian, and The Cupola (Gettysburg College). She has organized activities on cultural-spiritual China for an extensive period of time, including the research, the analysis, and the maximal reconstruction of Chen Zi-Ang’s physical appearance from the perspective of American psychology, the creation of portraits of Chen Zi-Ang based on such research, analysis, and maximal reconstruction, as well as the fundraising for these portraits. She currently (2023 CE) authors and translates Fervent Tears and Gem-Like Blood: Chen Zi-Ang’s Chinese Route of Martyrdom — this book’s American English version is to be published by the Moldova-based Eliva Press — in addition to Scarlet Tears on an Elegiac Gem Zither, a historical novel set in medieval China. As for languages, she is most familiar with Traditional Chinese with numerous respectful and modest dictions. Website of Rivolia Chen Xiao-Yu the Confucianist Warrior: holychina.wordpress.com.

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陳瀟玉（2000年3月19日－），華夏詩人、文人、學者、譯者、華夏文化與精神活動組織者。現任臺灣古風詩社理事。以綜合學科方式，研析、追隨、紀念中世華夏（又稱中古中國等等）詩人、文人、學者、兩度入獄者、烈士陳子昂，並從事以華夏文化與精神（如儒俠黃宗羲之貢獻），為主題之研析、著述、英譯。約自十一歲起，積極參與重新理解、深入欣賞、深度演繹華夏文化與精神之社會、歷史大潮。之所以放逐己身於中國大陸之外，有兩個重大原因：其一，陳子昂在當前（2023年）「中國大陸版維琪法國」之下處境，就像貞德在維琪法國處境；其二，此生利他使命重大維度，是作為詩人、文人、學者、譯者、華夏文化與精神活動組織者，使這天下無人視中華為野蠻敵國；由於職業身分，不是政治領袖、政評人等等，在職業與公眾領域，自身政治性不算很強，但自身使命與政治之間，有千絲萬縷關聯；實踐此生造福他人使命，就得作為詩人、文人、學者、譯者、華夏文化與精神活動組織者，回應政治與自身使命之間，千絲萬縷關聯。

除卻編譯評論《如花如劍如流星：陳子昂之奮戰、被囚與殉道》（奇西瑙：愛麗娃書局，2023）、原創並編譯《儒俠抽思錄》（自行出版；亞馬遜自行出版，2023），自青春期起，又有詩文譯作，在美國與臺灣這些平臺發表：《中華詩詞》、《乾坤詩刊》、《葡萄園詩刊》、安彬書院（Abington Friends School）《全樹》（The Whole Tree）、《水星》（The Mercury）、《靄嵐線上譯刊》（Ezra: An Online Journal of Translation）、《格思人報》（The Gettysburgian）、學問樓（格思書院）（Cupola (Gettysburg College)）。長期組織華夏文化與精神活動，如從美國心理學角度，研析並最大限度重構陳子昂形貌、基於這般研析與最大限度重構，為陳子昂畫像、為這些畫像籌款。目前（2023年）正自撰自譯《熱淚與碧血：陳子昂華夏殉道之路》——此書美國英文版，將由摩爾多瓦愛麗娃書局出版——，與中世華夏（又稱中古中國等等）歷史小說《錦瑟紅淚》。在語言方面，最適應者，乃多用謙語敬辭之傳統華文。儒俠陳瀟玉網：holychina.wordpress.com。

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敬請諸君賜教。

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在下頓首，歡迎諸君，賜教在下。

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[明志
詩文萬卷獻神州，孤鳳浩歌蒼水愁。取義一生無別物，指間青筆作吳鉤。]

"愁"字顯得軟了一點，若用"流"會否較好？

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敬覆閣下：問安，有勞蒞臨賜教。李義山作詩用典，許多時候，用典確，用字美。如，義山<重過聖女祠>有：「萼綠華來無定所，杜蘭香去未移時」。萼綠華、杜蘭香皆仙，這是用典確；「萼綠華、杜蘭香」，這是用字美。在下認真研習義山為詩之法。在下「孤鳳浩歌蒼水愁」中，「蒼水」二字自美，與此同時，「蒼水」乃近代明季張烈士，尊諱煌言之號。閣下有何高見？暇時不妨賜示。

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歡迎諸賢，不吝賜示：

一、閣下認為，《雲山集》風格如何，水平如何？
二、閣下認為，《雲山集》有何藝文弱點？

頓首再拜。

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[孤鳳浩歌蒼水愁]初覺愁字較軟，[流]則令人想起[不盡長江滾滾流]，較有氣勢，襯起浩歌的浩字，顯得慷慨激昂。或許是我未理解何謂浩歌。

浩歌可是解悲歌？

發現你較喜用愁、寒、病、悲諸字，詩意較落寞哀傷。

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有勞先生蒞臨賜教。屈靈均〈少司命〉有「臨風怳兮浩歌」，李長吉有佳作〈浩歌〉。此二浩歌，亦浩亦悲。在下之意：單看「浩歌」二字，這歌但「浩」，若思及屈靈均、李長吉二實例，二實例中之歌，亦浩亦悲。就目前《雲山集》看，先生所形：「多悲愁寒病之語，落寞淒傷之境（要義）」，較確，有勞先生賜示。同時，在下歡迎更多方家賜示。

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在下今日更新此集。

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在下今調排版。

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秋水詞長吟安
建議大作每帖只貼一首或一組作品，比較方便讀者針對同一主題咀嚼品評。
當初雅集設立本版，立有版規，其中第五條可供參考：
(五)因本版所有管理人都是業餘身份，難免回應略慢，也因此請各位一天內不要多貼，一至三首，請各界見諒。